script, "rich world of blogosphere" hard to translate into action -- was what Ana (my daughter, who works for L.A. talent agency I.C.M.) said about proposed script (see explanation at http://aboutamherst.blogspot.com/2007/04/how-about-this-for-screenplay.html) Must introduce conflict by Page 10, heroine bottoms out end of Act 2.In response and after thinking some more, I come up with these modifications.
1) Drop the cat and wild turkey wondering around town in opening exterior shot. Make that JUST a turkey.
2) Locale: Pittsfield, MA., once a thriving General Electric town, now sad, post-industrial. Open with turkey wandering down train tracks, amid empty GE buildings, PCB-filled Silver Lake, Housatonic River undergoing dredging for more PCBs.
3) Opening interior shot: hospital room. Cat blogger talking to brother, small-time scribe and once small-time scribe, about downward spiral of newspapers.
4) Multiple cat owner either DIES or faces EVICTION by city.
More later.
1 comment:
I think if you are going to open with the main character and her brother talking about the newspaper, the newspaper should have something to do with the story; you should come back to it later, or it should somehow tie-in directly to the blog. The opening scene of a movie usually establishes the motif, giving the viewer an idea of what's in store for them. For example, the romantic comedy LOVE ACTUALLY opens in an airport - amid all sorts of teary reunions and departures - with a voice-over about the airport as a place where love is most apparent. MOst horror movies open with something ominous/scary, ect...
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